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Post by Heartswell. on Wed 20 May 2009, 1:22 pm

Growing out of his chest were

Rib-flowers, red-glazed, sprawled

On the ashes of your war's corpse

Tender, their thorns weep; so hungry and alone they

Eat up your molten bullets, your leftovers

Swallowed by the sand and the fumes, swallowed them to the bone

Quenching the soil's

Undying bloodlust. He's

Eaten; and in your war's stomach, he's rotting



It's an acrostic.
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Post by Jack Skellington on Wed 20 May 2009, 6:07 pm

This is beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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Post by LADIES AND GENTLEMEN on Thu 21 May 2009, 6:35 pm

God, fatma, your writing is exquisite. It's like... fuck.

You know how I love dystopia? How I love China? How it's all such ugly things really but it looks so beautiful. That's your writing. No matter how horrid or twisted or messed-up the meaning really is, it's like fucking jemstones the way you make your words work. It always leaves me in awe.

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Post by quinn allman's hair. on Sun 24 May 2009, 10:39 am

NOT COOL What a poem.
That was brilliant... just fucking brilliant.

And even thought it was an acrostic, I love how you made it flow continuously. nawwww
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