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Post by tea-boy. on Wed 25 Mar 2009, 12:02 am

And she said,
"That's all very well in your head,
But it's such a glorious time when the heart swells then cries."

An orange leaf splits from its tree and lands beneath our feet.
Just another autumn day dusted with a daze.

Will you take a walk with me?

I hear laughing children in an empty playground.
The wind’s kicking up something strange in my mind.

Will you take a walk with me?

Fall, won’t you fall back on me?
We’re turning seasons into people.
Yeah, no one needs to know.
No one needs to know.

Won’t you please just take a walk with me?
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Post by Isis on Wed 25 Mar 2009, 12:56 am

This is like whoa. I can barely get my head around it. Sort of like a lot of your work. It's beautiful. The words are perfect, flawless. There's something about it that just leaps at me, the language, the images, the symbols. It's one of those poems that I have to just keep reading over and over and try to figure out just what it means, but I never get there. I think my mind is too simple. All through reading this, I was reminded of your poem Lee because of the 'will you take a walk with me'.

Overall, I love it. It's beautifully written. And it really grabs my mind. I'm going to be spending a lot of time re-reading this over the next week.
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Post by tea-boy. on Wed 25 Mar 2009, 12:57 am

Thanks Isis. -loves-
I'm glad you like it.
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