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"Ocean Of Pain"

Post by OmegaPatty on Fri 20 Mar 2009, 10:48 pm

For those who don't know, I like to write my poetry as if they were songs. And please, no copying! I poured my heart and soul into these, and this is one of my favourites... Enjoy!


"Ocean Of Pain"

Verse 1:
Each day is like a chapter,
Each life is like a story,
Every time you turn a page,
You値l find me with no glory,
Believing things will go my way,
Will only get my hopes up,
In all honesty things lead to pain,
There痴 never a time for enough,

Bridge:
Sometimes I wish I had died,
To end the suffering of what痴 inside,

Chorus:
This igniting flame melts my heart,
A cyclone tears my soul apart,
These days I get caught in the rain,
I知 bleeding an ocean of pain,

Verse 2:
I知 thrown over-board, no acceptance,
I知 drowning helplessly out there,
The evening comes and the water is dark,
Nightmares of eternal despair,
I知 stranded here with no light,
I give up without thinking,
To let go of unfinished tears,
This anguish leaves me sinking,

Repeat Bridge

Repeat Chorus

Verse 3:
Replaying moments of my torment,
Trying to shake the images you gave,
I値l drill a hole and rip them out,
And let my blood drip down on your grave
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Re: "Ocean Of Pain"

Post by lyrical_mess on Fri 20 Mar 2009, 11:03 pm

Can I just say, it really ruins the piece for me to see "Verse 1" and "Chorus" written as headings all over the place.

I really like the last verse though.
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Post by OmegaPatty on Fri 20 Mar 2009, 11:06 pm

Yeah, I wrote them as songs you see lol I dreamt of becoming a singer/songwriter, but I'm being realistic now lol so I wrote them like they were lyrics, and I guess I'm just posting them as is... sorry if it's annoying Crying or Very sad
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Post by lyrical_mess on Fri 20 Mar 2009, 11:51 pm

....but there's a seperate forum for lyrics.

And see, even if they are lyrics, you don't need to explicitly point out which part is the verse and which is the bridge and chorus.

Don't crryyyyyyy -loves-
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Post by OmegaPatty on Mon 23 Mar 2009, 10:23 pm

I see your point, it's just I don't really see them as lyrics because there is no music to them... it's hard to explain but yeah lol
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